Feedback on 2nd Draft

On Thursday we showed our second
draft of our production to receive further feedback and see what we had manage
to improve well and what still needed redoing. So we were then closer to
reaching our target grade for our production work

Feedback;
· Holding shots steady;
“Mostly very good” – although we
still need to re-film the shots of masks as they are to jumpy.

·Framing a shot;
The shot of Maya and Millie walking in the heels still doesn’t work even though
we slowed it down therefore we will need to think of a new idea of how to go
from Millie to Mayas feet successfully making it a smooth cut but also noticeable.
We are thinking of using Paige’s shoes as she is a bigger size than mille
therefore the transformation may be clearer. Mrs also said there is “some
really nice framing of your external shots”

·Appropriate material;
Good use of the masks (although needs to be re-filmed)
Magazine cover and fashion items – represent beauty

·Selecting mise-en-scene;
Put masks on sticks as previously mentioned so hands do not have to be seen
Change what Maya is reading when she is sitting down to a fashion magazine so
we stay to the theme of beauty.
Good Locations.

·Editing for meaning;
Cut the shot of Maya reading before the hand comes in.

·Varied shot transitions, caption and other FX;
Good ideas for green screen, another idea is that the first shot of me on the
magazine cover we should use a still image of me which then turns into a moving
image of me lip-syncing.
Speeding up on the crows on the chorus was a good idea.

·Use of sound with images/editing;
We need to check on part of my lip-syncing as it is slightly out – may need to
be re-filmed.

Overall comment;
“Definitely improving showing advance skills in green screen”

To do list;
1. Improve mask shots
2. Improve shots of Maya
3.Get more images of fashion – linking to theme