Rough Cut Feedback

Feedback Millie, Gabby, and Paige

Strong aspects

·      You have a range of creative ideas for what you want to do with your film opening by using split screen and still images.

·      The music is appropriate

·      There is nice use of images and graphics

·      The effect of the page turn works well, possibly consider using an effect of having the photos dropping one on top of the other?

Things to improve

Editing

·      The timing of the shots needs to be tightened up.

·      Cut down on the shots – with the girls walking and talking

·      The titles need to be completed and need to be tighter.

·       You also need to have a production company at the start with the directors.

·      You could add a ‘ripple effect’ when the main subject is daydreaming

·      You need to go back to an establishing shot of the subject in the mirror once you have the close up of the lips otherwise this disorientates the viewer

·      You could ‘hold the frame’ on the last shot of the girls together and then have is continue in motion.

Filming

·      You need to consider re-shooting the hair brushing scene and using the voiceover.

Sound

·      The audio levels are not clear where they are talking

·      You cant here the voice over – you need to adjust these levels

·      The music needs to be cut at beginning where the titles are.

·      Use quick shots of the photo sequence, using flashes of white and sound effects of a photo camera.

·      Consider having music and slow motion when the boy arrives and different sound effects to accentuate – look at Romeo & Juliet by Sam Mendes.